- Pitch
- Feedback
- The feedback I received mostly comprised of the room I was in and the accompanying echo that resulted from it.
- I was surprised by the amount of people who felt it was a great presentation. I thought it could have been a lot better and I tried to improve upon it in this pitch.
- I did not think anything was wrong or silly with the feedback from my first pitch. I did not think it was a great pitch but the feedback I received mostly centered around the echo in the room.
- Changes
- I changed the room to a smaller room as to avoid the echo from the previous pitch.
- I mentioned the name of the product, "Covades" in the pitch this time.
- I focused more on the benefits of the product and dust elimination with a mention of the fashion statement for the home.
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Brian,
ReplyDeleteI thought that this pitch was on point. You were very clear and got to the point quickly. I think that sometimes for me it is hard to get everything into 60-90 second time slot. I like to B.S. and talk, so it can be a challenge sometimes for me. However, you nailed it! You were presentable and spoke clearly, which is important! Job well done!
Matt,
DeleteThanks. I will still try to improve and perfect it for the last pitch.
Hey Brian! Your pitch was spot on; from the hook to the ending you really drew your listener in by just stating the facts that everyone needs to know. By focusing on the benefits you created a product that all users could potentially use and get their money's worth out of it. Your product seems awesome because you are doing such a good job selling it.
ReplyDeleteJayme,
DeleteThank you. I am really trying and this is actually kind of fun.
I agree. I thought this pitch was a lot better. You communicated your point very well, and I didn't really lose interest throughout. That doesn't mean the last one was bad though haha. I think we have similar approaches to the pitch by just stating the facts, and honestly the product can just sell itself from there. Great Elevator pitch, and great job on improving!
ReplyDeleteBeau,
DeleteI agree we are similar in our pitches. We both have a calm, cool demeanor and let the product speak for itself.
Hey Brian,
ReplyDeleteFirst and foremost, the room change definitely helped the sound quality. I think your delivery also improved, you sounded more confident in not only what you were going to say but also about your product idea in general. Something I didn’t notice before that I really liked was that you delivered your pitch as if talking to a potential investor rather than a potential customer. I think this is actually really important since you have to first sell your idea to investors before you can sell your product to customers. As far as something to improve on for the third elevator pitch (you seem like the kind of person to appreciate constructive criticism, so I’m going to be super picky here), I would work on the hook in the beginning. I think it’s good right now but it didn’t really grab my attention until about 10 seconds in, and I think you could rework it a bit to grab the viewer’s attention sooner. Maybe ask a question right off the bat or come up with a catchy slogan. Also get excited! You have a fantastic product and I think if you add some more enthusiasm to your pitch it will definitely help it sell. If you’re excited about the product, your investors and customers will feed off of your energy. Great job!
Briana,
DeleteYes I love constructive and even destructive criticism. I think it's the best way to improve as it brings light to an area that I may never have noticed such as your suggestion. I will definitely keep this in mind and try to come up with a slogan for the next pitch as I am always looking to improve. I guess I am sort of a perfectionist.
Brian,
ReplyDeleteLike everybody else has stated the room change helped the sound quality a great deal. I feel like you did a great job captivating the listener and keeping them interested the whole time. Also the pitch was the perfect length not too long and not too short. I think the product you decided to go with will get a lot of peoples attention and you do a great job at selling it so keep up the good work!
Gabriella,
DeleteThank you for commenting and the feedback. I agree the room change was a big shift to making the pitch a lot more presentable.
I think you have a really innovative idea. My most concern is that, I myself that sleeps with a ceiling fan nightly knows how annoying a ceiling fan can be that gets off balance. Spandex is definitely a lightweight material, however I know how easily a ceiling fan can become off balance, even without added materials. This will bug you throughout the night, and become annoying, especially if it's your bedroom ceiling fan that may interrupt your sleep. My advice would be to provide weights with your product also, to prevent this from happening and provide comfort to your customer base ahead of time.
ReplyDeleteLynn,
DeleteThis is an excellent suggestion and feedback that I had not previously heard or thought of before. You are right about the annoyance with a fan being off balance. I will look into weights or some way to keep the fans balanced with the use of my product. Thank you so much for your valuable input.